The concept for these photographs are very interesting! I just wish they were a bit more polished - for example in the 6th and 7th image, the background is distracting and takes away from the purpose of the image.
The theme is interesting and I really appreciate your idea of storytelling. But the composition in some photos are repetitive and maybe you would avoid this problem next week.
I like the additional hands, they add intent to the photos, but the first two don't speak to anything at all. With the bed photos, I wish you would have directed the model to look a different way because the staring takes me out of the photo, the next one is more succesfull.
These photos have potential to be engaging but right now they are just snap shots for me. I attribute this to what Catherine stated about them needing to be polished. There are too many distracting elements in the background of these compositions. The first photo's angle would have been more intriguing if you played more with depth of field.
I see the intent with your photos, but i also agree with the previous comments that they need to be more polished. When shooting indoors, you especially need to be aware of the materials you are using and what's in the background of the photo. Such as the cords to the right in photo 7 are distracting. I would love to see you play around with different angles of your photos to make them more interesting
I think a shooting like this could really benefit from taking place in a studio, which would provide distinct lighting, the elimination of distracting background elements (objects and textures alike) and give the images a more professional air than dorm room feel. I think I can understand the emotions you're trying to communicate, but I'm also distracted by how casual and convenient the setting and lighting are. In the first image, I see someone skipping class and sitting in the hall with a guitar; in the second, I see a friend posing for a picture at your abrupt entrance with a camera. The setting creates story as much as facial expressions, hand gestures, and symbolism.
His clothing is another thing that gets taken into account - what does his shirt say (literal text), what do the logos stand for, is that a breast cancer awareness ribbon clipped to his shirt (B&W photography - what color, what meaning). I think image 3 is the more successful one, since it well communicates the feeling of oppression and reluctant practice etc, but with image 8 for example his blank expression says nothing, I'm not sure why the hands are there, "raise the roof?" ?? more struggle maybe could communicate strain/burden/stress/ambition
As many people mentioned, the backdrop is very distracting and draws away from the subject. I do appreciate what you attempted to do with the photos of the guitar player and the hands. If they had been better executed, it would be very captivating to look at.
I wish you can focus more on the details of your photos, since last class Kashif talked bout how tiny details like the clothes and makeups help the overall storytelling of your pictures. For example, in the fifth photo the black upper-left corner, did you make it that way intentionally? And the blurry line in the back ground in the sixth photo, is it there a part of your composition? Anyway, you are using the dorm and very smartly to set up the background!
Really interesting imagery! I like the addition of the random hands, they evoke a lot of thought. I think my favorite is the last one. Maybe next time while doing those floor photos, lay out a sheet under him to avoid the carpet pattern.
I appreciate the narrative you created using the same subject. I think some of the images are a bit repetitive, and the background textures are a little distracting.
The concept for these photographs are very interesting! I just wish they were a bit more polished - for example in the 6th and 7th image, the background is distracting and takes away from the purpose of the image.
ReplyDeleteThe theme is interesting and I really appreciate your idea of storytelling. But the composition in some photos are repetitive and maybe you would avoid this problem next week.
ReplyDeleteI like the additional hands, they add intent to the photos, but the first two don't speak to anything at all. With the bed photos, I wish you would have directed the model to look a different way because the staring takes me out of the photo, the next one is more succesfull.
ReplyDeleteThese photos have potential to be engaging but right now they are just snap shots for me. I attribute this to what Catherine stated about them needing to be polished. There are too many distracting elements in the background of these compositions. The first photo's angle would have been more intriguing if you played more with depth of field.
ReplyDeleteI see the intent with your photos, but i also agree with the previous comments that they need to be more polished. When shooting indoors, you especially need to be aware of the materials you are using and what's in the background of the photo. Such as the cords to the right in photo 7 are distracting. I would love to see you play around with different angles of your photos to make them more interesting
ReplyDeleteI think a shooting like this could really benefit from taking place in a studio, which would provide distinct lighting, the elimination of distracting background elements (objects and textures alike) and give the images a more professional air than dorm room feel. I think I can understand the emotions you're trying to communicate, but I'm also distracted by how casual and convenient the setting and lighting are. In the first image, I see someone skipping class and sitting in the hall with a guitar; in the second, I see a friend posing for a picture at your abrupt entrance with a camera. The setting creates story as much as facial expressions, hand gestures, and symbolism.
ReplyDeleteHis clothing is another thing that gets taken into account - what does his shirt say (literal text), what do the logos stand for, is that a breast cancer awareness ribbon clipped to his shirt (B&W photography - what color, what meaning). I think image 3 is the more successful one, since it well communicates the feeling of oppression and reluctant practice etc, but with image 8 for example his blank expression says nothing, I'm not sure why the hands are there, "raise the roof?" ?? more struggle maybe could communicate strain/burden/stress/ambition
As many people mentioned, the backdrop is very distracting and draws away from the subject. I do appreciate what you attempted to do with the photos of the guitar player and the hands. If they had been better executed, it would be very captivating to look at.
ReplyDeleteI wish you can focus more on the details of your photos, since last class Kashif talked bout how tiny details like the clothes and makeups help the overall storytelling of your pictures. For example, in the fifth photo the black upper-left corner, did you make it that way intentionally? And the blurry line in the back ground in the sixth photo, is it there a part of your composition? Anyway, you are using the dorm and very smartly to set up the background!
ReplyDeleteReally interesting imagery! I like the addition of the random hands, they evoke a lot of thought. I think my favorite is the last one. Maybe next time while doing those floor photos, lay out a sheet under him to avoid the carpet pattern.
ReplyDeleteI appreciate the narrative you created using the same subject. I think some of the images are a bit repetitive, and the background textures are a little distracting.
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