Valentina! You played really well with mood this week and told a story with your pictures! The photo at night on the street was very well done and didn't appear grainy despite the time of day. You played a lot with lines and balance this week, but the photos are predominately rule of thirds. Another critique is the pasta which I love because it turns the story of the narrative into a woman abandoned because all she eats is unsauced spaghetti which is hilarious but I'm sure you had different intentions.
Your images tell a story which I appreciate. They are mostly sharp which is nice to see. The angles you chose are intriguing, but the third image (on the stairs) makes her body look a little distorted and the railing is not equally framed on both sides.
The story you created was interesting but the 4th picture has nothing interesting, competition-wise. Maybe taking it from a different angle would make it more interesting.
I appreciate your focus on a narrative with your photos, but some of the images feel repetitive. I think more dynamic perspectives and compositions could create variety in a series focused on one subject.
For the sixth image I wonder if the lonely feeling would be amplified if the cropping hadn't been so tight. With the subject pushed off to the side, the focus changes to the vertical center of the table particularly because the image pretty symmetrical/divided down the center. Also the flowers covering the bit where the table meets the wall (along with the tilted picture frame) cause the overall image to feel tilted, unless it's intentional (in which case having the picture frame that says "love" completely in the picture, but still crooked, would support the theme). I think some of your images could use more contrast (the ones that are predominantly midtones because of the low lighting - 1, 2, 3, 8). My favorite is number 9, for the wide range in value, balance in patterning/simplicity, texture, and mood. Also, appropriate story considering the date :P
oh by higher contrast I don't mean necessarily taking it to photoshop, but maybe including things that are lighter in value to balance out the dark parts
I love the idea of using pictures to tell stories (the story I figured out through your pictures is "a heartbroken girl and her lonely Valentine's day")! You combine the technique such as the rule of third in some of your photos (3rd photo), however, I'd love to see you try out more techniques we discussed last week (such as symmetric, asymmetric, lines etc.) and pictures taken from different time of the day.
I'd like to see some techniques like discussed in class - for instance, maybe in the first image positioning her body to lead the viewers eyes to the flowers - the emphasis point.
I really appreciate how your photos tell a story and I appreciate how you experimented with balance - you focused on the rule of thirds, asymmetry, and symmetry. I also see that you used dark lighting that conveys a dark/depressed mood. However, I think the first photo is a little too dark. I think the angle of the girl on the stairs is off - I don't think the position of her body is unflattering.
Valentina! You played really well with mood this week and told a story with your pictures! The photo at night on the street was very well done and didn't appear grainy despite the time of day. You played a lot with lines and balance this week, but the photos are predominately rule of thirds. Another critique is the pasta which I love because it turns the story of the narrative into a woman abandoned because all she eats is unsauced spaghetti which is hilarious but I'm sure you had different intentions.
ReplyDeleteYour images tell a story which I appreciate. They are mostly sharp which is nice to see. The angles you chose are intriguing, but the third image (on the stairs) makes her body look a little distorted and the railing is not equally framed on both sides.
ReplyDeleteThe story you created was interesting but the 4th picture has nothing interesting, competition-wise. Maybe taking it from a different angle would make it more interesting.
ReplyDeleteI appreciate your focus on a narrative with your photos, but some of the images feel repetitive. I think more dynamic perspectives and compositions could create variety in a series focused on one subject.
ReplyDeleteFor the sixth image I wonder if the lonely feeling would be amplified if the cropping hadn't been so tight. With the subject pushed off to the side, the focus changes to the vertical center of the table particularly because the image pretty symmetrical/divided down the center. Also the flowers covering the bit where the table meets the wall (along with the tilted picture frame) cause the overall image to feel tilted, unless it's intentional (in which case having the picture frame that says "love" completely in the picture, but still crooked, would support the theme).
ReplyDeleteI think some of your images could use more contrast (the ones that are predominantly midtones because of the low lighting - 1, 2, 3, 8). My favorite is number 9, for the wide range in value, balance in patterning/simplicity, texture, and mood. Also, appropriate story considering the date :P
oh by higher contrast I don't mean necessarily taking it to photoshop, but maybe including things that are lighter in value to balance out the dark parts
ReplyDeleteI love the idea of using pictures to tell stories (the story I figured out through your pictures is "a heartbroken girl and her lonely Valentine's day")! You combine the technique such as the rule of third in some of your photos (3rd photo), however, I'd love to see you try out more techniques we discussed last week (such as symmetric, asymmetric, lines etc.) and pictures taken from different time of the day.
ReplyDeleteI'd like to see some techniques like discussed in class - for instance, maybe in the first image positioning her body to lead the viewers eyes to the flowers - the emphasis point.
ReplyDeleteImage 6 is a great asymmetry. However, some pictures look similar. You might need more various photos next time.
ReplyDeleteI really appreciate how your photos tell a story and I appreciate how you experimented with balance - you focused on the rule of thirds, asymmetry, and symmetry. I also see that you used dark lighting that conveys a dark/depressed mood. However, I think the first photo is a little too dark. I think the angle of the girl on the stairs is off - I don't think the position of her body is unflattering.
ReplyDeleteWow, these tell such an interesting (and sad) narrative! I feel like the 8th image is just a bit too dark, but overall all your photos have good mood!
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