The technical aspects of these images are nice, but the message feels a little cliche or too obvious in my opinion. The fruit clearly has sexual innuendos, but I think these could have been furthered if they weren't so clean. The lipstick is a good touch but maybe getting it more all over her lips and on the fruit would push the sexual vibe. The glasses show intellect and the pearls represent wealth, so I'm assuming the theme is like a "good girl" with a dark side. I would try exploring ways to send messages beyond using the mouth, because these are all really nice photos but they don't feel unique.
I can see your intention and your idea. I think this is good because it's better to present your message obviously, instead of making others confuse. In image 9, I feel like the glasses are distractive.
Angelica, The photos this week have fallen flat for me. Here's why: Your light source needs to be more definite. A moveable lamp with a piece of white cloth stretched over it would give you a diffuse light source that would have lit your models face beautifully, and because it's moveable, you can change the position of the light to create a vast amount of effects. Also, painting the lips has been done, if you are engaging with the banana is a phallic symbols, I would have painted the banana itself!!! Black would have been tres controversial or if thats not the direction you want to go, how about spray painting it silver? or cutting a hole through the centre so it creates a small negative space? There are so many ways to make your work more interesting. Smudging the lipstick is a great idea! make it messy. And a great contrast would be to slick back the model's hair into a tight bun so the her head against the background creates a more definitive shape. Don't make steps back at this point, your project 2 work was impressive, go to the next step now.
These images seem to lack depth - maybe try using a stronger light source for greater contrast? And I also feel like your concept could have been pushed further to have greater impact. Like Jenna said, try smearing the lipstick or get some shots that are maybe not as flattering for the model, but get the message across more clearly.
The last image is sexy alright but like the hair flying across the pearls really takes me out of it because it makes me think of like hair in my mouth which is always uncomfortable. Another concept for this is to have the model interact with rotten fruit, which altogether disgusting for the model could give these the push that ppl seem to think they need.
I can a clearly see the massage of what you are trying to convey with your photos this week. However, the metaphor of eating bananas is too well-known and obvious that it makes your photos less artistic and less creative. I think the way you frame your first, fourth and fifth photos are successful cause the subject matter is simple which makes the photos strong and viewers will focus directly on the subjects.
I appreciate the narrative but I feel like it was bit cliche. You can use a lot of this elements that are cliche and do something to make it different like what Kashif said of painting the banana.
I think these are the beginning of something you can push even further. Along with what everyone else has said, I think another way you could also push it by incorporating more of the body (or face even) than just their mouth. It looks very repetitive, but I think you can easily fix that with a bit more experimenting.
The technical aspects of these images are nice, but the message feels a little cliche or too obvious in my opinion. The fruit clearly has sexual innuendos, but I think these could have been furthered if they weren't so clean. The lipstick is a good touch but maybe getting it more all over her lips and on the fruit would push the sexual vibe. The glasses show intellect and the pearls represent wealth, so I'm assuming the theme is like a "good girl" with a dark side. I would try exploring ways to send messages beyond using the mouth, because these are all really nice photos but they don't feel unique.
ReplyDeleteI can see your intention and your idea. I think this is good because it's better to present your message obviously, instead of making others confuse. In image 9, I feel like the glasses are distractive.
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ReplyDeleteThe photos this week have fallen flat for me. Here's why: Your light source needs to be more definite. A moveable lamp with a piece of white cloth stretched over it would give you a diffuse light source that would have lit your models face beautifully, and because it's moveable, you can change the position of the light to create a vast amount of effects. Also, painting the lips has been done, if you are engaging with the banana is a phallic symbols, I would have painted the banana itself!!! Black would have been tres controversial or if thats not the direction you want to go, how about spray painting it silver? or cutting a hole through the centre so it creates a small negative space? There are so many ways to make your work more interesting. Smudging the lipstick is a great idea! make it messy. And a great contrast would be to slick back the model's hair into a tight bun so the her head against the background creates a more definitive shape. Don't make steps back at this point, your project 2 work was impressive, go to the next step now.
These images seem to lack depth - maybe try using a stronger light source for greater contrast? And I also feel like your concept could have been pushed further to have greater impact. Like Jenna said, try smearing the lipstick or get some shots that are maybe not as flattering for the model, but get the message across more clearly.
ReplyDeleteThe last image is sexy alright but like the hair flying across the pearls really takes me out of it because it makes me think of like hair in my mouth which is always uncomfortable. Another concept for this is to have the model interact with rotten fruit, which altogether disgusting for the model could give these the push that ppl seem to think they need.
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ReplyDeleteI can a clearly see the massage of what you are trying to convey with your photos this week. However, the metaphor of eating bananas is too well-known and obvious that it makes your photos less artistic and less creative. I think the way you frame your first, fourth and fifth photos are successful cause the subject matter is simple which makes the photos strong and viewers will focus directly on the subjects.
ReplyDeleteI appreciate the narrative but I feel like it was bit cliche. You can use a lot of this elements that are cliche and do something to make it different like what Kashif said of painting the banana.
ReplyDeleteI think these are the beginning of something you can push even further. Along with what everyone else has said, I think another way you could also push it by incorporating more of the body (or face even) than just their mouth. It looks very repetitive, but I think you can easily fix that with a bit more experimenting.
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